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« on: 09 30, 2005, 02:59: PM »

My blood runs cold
As I look on the face
Of my beloved
His eyes are empty
Dead
I hold his eyes open
And scream
My rage
My fear
My anger
My heart breaks
I howl
I warn the others
A mighty warrior is coming
I look at the battle
With new eyes
And now
The battle truely begins
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« Reply #1 on: 09 30, 2005, 10:44: PM »

Is there a Story here?
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« Reply #2 on: 10 01, 2005, 12:42: AM »

No, just an scene, I suppose.  Just something that came to me.

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« Reply #3 on: 10 01, 2005, 04:41: AM »

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quoth Abbot Nej vIt: Is there a Story here?

Does there need to be? It’s poetry.

I see a story here, a story of transformations. The first is the  more mundane transformation of life to death of the warrior. The second is a rapid series of transformations of the writer -- fury, fear, heartbreak are jumbled together into a new, unsettling perspective on battle and war. Very visceral. Well done, KChara!
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« Reply #4 on: 10 01, 2005, 04:46: AM »

Thank you Kesvirit!  You read exactly what I was trying to say, thank you!

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« Reply #5 on: 10 01, 2005, 09:59: AM »

Kesvirit,

All Cynisism Aside... Poetry Can Be So Many Different things to Different People... Many Poems Are Inspired by Events that Touch the Author Personally... Such a Poem as this may Touche The Reader in as Many Different ways... I Was Opening the Door for Zan K'Chara to Elaborate if they Wished...
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« Reply #6 on: 10 01, 2005, 10:52: PM »

Never set cynicism aside. You never know when you may need it.

Believe me, I am more than aware of the subjective nature of poetry, both in its execution and in its being read by others. Its general “anything goes” properties are a main reason why I detest it, do not consider it an art form, and generally do my best to avoid it. 

But KChara took the hackneyed Klingon themes of death and battle and brought something new to them. I appreciate the way the poem does not oversimplify and glorify them. Too many Klinfolk revel in war as a path to glory without understanding or acknowledging a very prominent downside: that those closest to us frequently die, leaving empty chunks in our lives that can never be filled and forever altering our perceptions.
 
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« Reply #7 on: 10 02, 2005, 05:04: AM »

Oh, please don't think that I was in any way offended!!  On the contrary, it was an inspration, and I'm running story lines in my head now about a short story to complement the poem!!  Thank you, I hope this will be a jump start into something new and exciting for me!  I've never shared any of my work before, not even with my husband.  But thanks to **everything** that has been said about the poems, good and bad, I'm going to start getting it out there for others to enjoy.  So thank you, and please don't apologize!!

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« Reply #8 on: 10 02, 2005, 12:46: PM »

maj!

I Would Enjoy Reading Such a Story...

Unlike our Esteemed (And Opinioned...<Chuckle>...), Moderator Kesvirit, I Happen to Think of Poetry as a Very Definite Form of Art... But Like all of the Arts Really, The Better the Work the More Esoteric it Can become... This is Hard to Place "Value" on in a Society that Still thinks of itself as being Essentially a Barter System... We have Traded True Bartering For The Exchange of Cash which Makes it Difficult to "Value" those who's Contributions Can not Easily Fall within a Set of Guidelines or Rules...

The Artist Who Starves for their Efforts because No One Can Find Suitable Value in their Work, May well Make their Decendants (Or More Likely Their Agents), Very Wealthy Once they have Died... The Only Legitimate "Rules" that have Ever Existed when it Comes to Art, are Where Physical Principles Come into Play, Such as Finding Ones Medium of Choice, and Taking the Time to Understand the Principles as they Apply to the Artist... All of the Rest is Garbage, Designed By those who can not Express themselves, In order to Catalog and Control Production of the Worst Possible Aspect of Art which is the Street Value, (Which the Artist Themselves Rarely, if Ever Gets to Enjoy)...

Ok... There is My Cynisism...<Snicker>... Poetry, Is Hard to Quantify... It is Hard to "Value"... And it is Hardly Alone in the "Anything Goes" World of Art... No Art Is "Great"... But there are Difinately Great Artists... And Here and there those Who Value that art for Reasons other than it's Market Value...
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« Reply #9 on: 10 02, 2005, 02:36: PM »

OH!  Your post reminded me of something that happened last night.  Someone offered to put my poems in a book that's coming out on Klingon poetry, art, short stories, and filk.  Upon learning this I was very honored and excited!  So I called my mother, whose first response is "How much are they paying you?"  ARGH!!!!!!!  I'm guessing they won't, I don't care, it's just so wonderful to have so many people read and enjoy my poems!!!  Of course, people like Mom don't understand art for the sake of art...  she only wants $$

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