a Haiku in Klingon?

[SimonBB]

Hello!
I need help to translate a haïku, it is for a poetry show in foreign language, and it would really kick 'o' if I could do it in Klingon!

Here is the aiku:

The hero died
at the front line
of the novel I wanted to write.

Thank you very much!

[ter'eS]

That's not a haiku.

Edit: OK, I guess it is, just arranged oddly.



lut vIqon vIneH
'ach mu'tlheghDaj wa'DIchDaq
Hegh lut Sub rIntaH

lut story
vIqon I write
vIneH I want to
'ach but
mu'tlheghDaj it's sentence
wa'DIchDaq first-in
Hegh dies
Sub the hero
rIntaH makes it completely done: "and that's that."



[Edit: combined double post. -=- Kesvirit]

[Kesvirit]

It is if one changes the breaks in the lines:

The hero died at              (five syllables)

the front line of the novel   (seven syllables)

I wanted to write.      (five syllables)

5-7-5. Proper haiku. And quite amusing, and the summary of my career as a would-be writer.

SimonBB, I also refer you to the long-past Great Klingon Haiku and Limerick Contest. There was never enough interest to justify another competitive round, but don’t let that stop you from showing off your compositional accomplishments. (Just remember the translation requirements as posted on the Rules and Regs page.)


(Addendum: Looks like ter'eS was busy posting his thoughts in two languages while I was busy editing mine in one. It never ceases to amaze me how some people can post on the wing.... My points still stand, though.)

[SimonBB]

Wow!
Thank you very much for the quick answer! This is great!
Made my day!