Dominion: comments please

[Kehlan]

I have posted the first few parts of a story I wrote.  I would very much like feedback - both favourable and unfavourable.  If people want more, i will continue posting it.
I hope you enjoy reading it.

Kehlan

[ter'eS]

Wow, this is pretty dang good.  I especially like your dialog, very realistic.

-- ter'eS

[Kehlan]

Glad you like it, but please tell me if you think I should change anything or if you have any ideas to improve it.
I have just posted the next installment, then that will be it for a little while as I am still working on the next part.  I find I can't write in sequence, the end is finished but not the middle.   I think it will end up being between 80 - 100 pages long, my biggest project ever.
I have taken a few liberties with the organisation of Klingon Imperial Intelligence as there is very little canon info about them (hope no agents are reading this)

Kehlan

[soup_borg]

I've read it and enjoyed it as well.  I'd like to give you some advice, but I'm still not that familiar with klingon culture.



SCPO Saleel Ki'kaal N'D'R, son of Do'Iteq
Chief Of the Boat, USS Antares
Obsidian Fleet Task Force 21-C

[ShinRa]

Qa'pla indeed.

I fear I will not be able to read all of this in one sitting.

[Kaga]

Well done, Kehlan! I have read only Part One, but I am already hooked, and will be returning for the rest of it! To be honest, the majority of fan-written stories, no matter what the franchise, appall me. There are simply two many poor writers out there. It does great honor to you that you are not one of them! What I have read so far is of great quality, my friend, and I will be reading the rest in short order. Qapla', and keep writing!



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[ShinRa]

(oh it's Qapla' ? you can tell i'm not a native speaker )